第一节(满分15分)
你校英文报正在开展“Make Our Campus More Beautiful”的征文活动。请你写一篇短文投稿,内容包括:
(1) 说明你发现的问题;
(2) 提出改进建议。
注意:
(1) 写作词数应为80左右;
(2) 可适当增加细节,使内容充实、行文连贯。
参考范文
Make Our Campus More Beautiful
Recently, I have noticed that our campus is not as tidy as it should be. Some students leave waste paper and drink bottles on the playground or beside the teaching buildings. Besides, a few students sometimes walk across the grass, which harms the plants and makes the campus look less beautiful.
To improve the situation, I think we should start with small actions. First, everyone should put rubbish into the right bins and help keep public areas clean. Second, we can design posters to remind students to protect flowers and grass. More importantly, each class can take turns to clean a certain area of the school.
Only when everyone takes responsibility can our campus become cleaner, greener andmore beautiful.
1. 建立“问题-建议”的结构支架
全文应呈现明显的“总-分-总”结构。开头简述背景并客观指出问题,这是立意的基石;主体段应逻辑清晰地罗列改进建议,通常使用“First, Second, Moreover/More importantly”等逻辑连接词,不仅能使内容层次分明,也能展现英语表达的组织能力;结尾处应呼吁全校师生参与,升华主题,这种“责任感归纳”能有效拔高文章的立意。
2. 细节填充与语言语境化
高考作文不仅要“言之有物”,还要“言之有据”。在描述问题时,不宜只说“校园不整洁”,而应具体到“操场、教学楼旁的垃圾”或“踩踏草坪”等细节,使问题显得真实可感(这是目前低分写作中存在的最大问题);在提出建议时,建议应具备可行性和操作性(如设计海报、值日制度),而非泛泛而谈。这样既满足了“细节充实”的要求,又展现了学生的真实生活场景。
3. 句式与词汇的得体运用
应注意长短句的搭配与书面语的运用。多使用被动语态(如“waste is left”)或强调句(如“Only when...”)来增加句式的丰富度。同时,使用地道的表达法能显著提升文采,例如使用“take turns to clean”、“take responsibility”、“start with small actions”等固定搭配,确保用词准确且行文流畅,从而在有限的词数内最大化体现语言功底。
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