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2026武汉五调｜删掉AI演讲稿后，她找到了真正的英雄

这篇读后续写以AI代写的虚假演讲稿 vs 父母真实的生活坚守为核心冲突，探讨了“真正的英雄”的定义，情节细腻、情感真挚，是近年高考高频的“科技与真实、平凡与伟大”主题，非常适合高三学生练习情感叙事写作。

📖 真题原题呈现

第二节 读后续写（满分25分）

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Judy tapped “join” on the screen, her only motivation being the extra credits. “If you join the speech contest, you will win five,” she told her friend Leo, who was lazily leaning against the wall. “Easy points,” Leo laughed, thinking a speech was just a collection of beautiful words.

To save time, Judy fed the topic “My Hero” to an AI tool. Within thirty seconds, a polished text appeared: Newton, Lincoln, Tesla… The stories of virtually any famous person came alive with perfect sentences. She printed it out, feeling satisfied with this neat yet shallow, fancy article. To her, it was a quick way to win without much effort.

However, the rehearsal (彩排) was a total disaster. Under the bright stage lights, she struggled to recall the long, difficult sentences. The words felt like borrowed clothes that didn’t fit. Coach Kim frowned, his eyes full of disappointment. “Good voice, Judy, but where is your heart? These aren’t your heroes.” Judy forced a smile, but the coach’s words stayed in her mind all afternoon.

That night, the familiar rattle (哐当声) of metal wheels woke her up. Looking out of the window, she saw her parents pushing their food cart (小推车) into the cold darkness. Dad whispered, “Fog’s thick. Gloves ready?” Mom answered, “Always.” Watching their fading figures, Judy felt a sharp pang in her heart. Suddenly, the “heroes” in her AI-generated text seemed so far away, while the true heroes were right here in the cold wind.

She sat at her laptop, deleted every word of the AI text, and typed: “My heroes leave at 4 am, so the city can eat at 7 am.” She wrote about the worn-out gloves and the smell of steaming hot dogs. The words were plain, but they breathed with true love.

The contest day finally came. Judy stood behind the curtain, legs shaking. Her parents sat in the third row, still wearing their faded work jackets. Judy pressed her handwritten speech to her chest, felt her heart pounding heavily, and whispered: “Stay calm.”

续写段落开头

Paragraph 1: Then came Judy’s turn.

Paragraph 2: After two seconds’ silence, thunderous applause erupted.

写作要求

1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 情节完整，逻辑连贯。

一、原文导读

（一）核心故事脉络

这是一篇从虚假浮华到真实真挚、从功利应付到真情流露的成长叙事：

• Judy为了加分，用AI生成了一篇以名人为主题的演讲稿，应付比赛。
• 彩排时，她被教练点出“没有真心、不是自己的英雄”，陷入反思。
• 深夜看到父母冒着严寒出摊的身影，她突然醒悟：真正的英雄，是为家庭默默付出的父母。
• 她连夜删掉AI文稿，写下了关于父母的平凡故事，准备真诚演讲。
• 续写走向：走上舞台，紧张开场→讲述父母的故事，情感渐入→打动全场，掌声雷动→明白：真正的英雄，就在身边，是那些平凡却坚定的爱。

（二）关键要素梳理

（三）🧠 主题导读｜如何从原文细节锁定文章主题

步骤1：圈画对比细节，抓内在冲突引导学生划出：AI-generated polished text / shallow, fancy article vs deleted every word / typed about her parents / plain words, true love→ 提问：Judy为什么要删掉AI写的文章，重新写父母的故事？→ 得出第一层立意：华丽辞藻≠真情，真诚比完美更动人。

步骤2：圈画关键对话，找转变根源引导学生划出：“Good voice, Judy, but where is your heart? These aren’t your heroes.”→ 提问：教练的话点醒了Judy什么？她对“英雄”的理解发生了什么变化？→ 得出第二层立意：英雄不是完美的名人，而是用爱支撑你的平凡人。

步骤3：圈画父母的细节描写，拔高核心主题引导学生划出：pushing their food cart into the cold darkness / worn-out gloves / steaming hot dogs / faded work jackets→ 提问：这些平凡的细节，为什么能打动Judy？它们代表了什么？→ 得出最终核心主题：真正的英雄，藏在平凡的付出里；最动人的力量，是发自内心的真诚与爱。

二、苏格拉底式提问｜引导学生梳理续写思路

1. 走上舞台的Judy，是什么状态？她会先做什么？
2. 她开口演讲时，会讲什么内容？语气会发生怎样的变化？
3. 看到台下的父母，她会有什么反应？会提到他们的细节吗？
4. 听众和评委的反应，会有什么变化？
5. 掌声响起后，Judy和父母会有怎样的互动？她会明白什么道理？

三、学生常见问题与教学对策

四、情感叙事类·通用动作+心理句式

✅ 紧张开场·动作描写

• stood frozen in the spotlight（聚光灯下僵住）
• clutched the speech tightly to her chest（紧紧攥着演讲稿）
• her hands trembled slightly（双手微微颤抖）
• took a deep breath and began to speak（深吸一口气，开口演讲）

✅ 渐入真情·心理描写

• Her voice grew steady as she spoke（她的声音渐渐平稳）
• A warm glow spread through her heart（一股暖流涌上心头）
• Her eyes locked with her parents’ in the crowd（她的目光与台下的父母相遇）
• Tears welled up in her eyes, but she kept going（泪水在眼眶打转，她却坚持讲完）

✅ 打动全场·场景描写

• The audience fell silent, listening intently（全场安静下来，认真倾听）
• Some listeners wiped tears from their eyes（有听众悄悄擦眼泪）
• Thunderous applause erupted, filling the hall（雷鸣般的掌声响彻全场）

✅ 结尾升华·主题句式

• I finally understood that true heroes are ordinary people with extraordinary love.
• The most touching speech is not made of fancy words, but of true feelings.
• It was not the AI-generated text, but the love in my heart that won the day.

五、23分以上分层续写范文

版本一（基础范文｜适配120分以下同学）

Para 1

Then came Judy’s turn. She walked onto the stage slowly, her legs still shaking. Clutching her handwritten speech tightly, she took a deep breath and began to speak. At first, her voice trembled with nervousness, but as she talked about her parents’ early mornings and worn-out gloves, her voice grew steady. She looked straight at her parents in the third row, her eyes shining with tears.

【教学批注】

• 动作细节：clutching her speech tightly / legs still shaking 精准刻画紧张状态；
• 细节呼应：回扣原文“handwritten speech、parents in the third row”；
• 逻辑闭环：上台紧张→开口演讲→渐入真情；
• 语言平实简洁，与原文细腻真挚的风格完全一致。

汪老师点评： 120分以下同学稳妥模板，情节完整、逻辑清晰。

Para 2

After two seconds’ silence, thunderous applause erupted. The audience stood up, clapping and cheering loudly. Judy bowed deeply, her heart full of joy and relief. When she stepped off the stage, her parents rushed over to hug her tightly. “We are so proud of you,” Mom whispered. Judy realized that true heroes were not famous people, but the ones who loved her silently.

【教学批注】

• 场景描写：thunderous applause erupted 体现演讲成功；
• 主题升华：回扣“平凡英雄、父母的爱”，立意精准；
• 句式简洁，得分稳定。

汪老师点评： 结尾反思到位，情感闭环完整，不跑偏、不翻车。

版本二（适配120分以上同学）

Para 1

Then came Judy’s turn. Stepping into the bright spotlight, her heart pounded wildly and her palms grew damp. Clutching her crumpled speech close to her chest, she took a shaky breath and began. Her voice trembled at first, but as she spoke of the cold dawns, the steaming hot dogs and her parents’ worn-out gloves, the nervousness faded away. She met her parents’ eyes in the crowd, and her voice grew firm and warm, every word filled with love.

【教学批注】

• 细节刻画：palms grew damp / crumpled speech 用感官细节强化紧张感；
• 情感细腻：从颤抖到坚定，贴合人物情绪变化；
• 叙事呼应：回扣父母出摊的细节，情节闭环完整；
• 语言克制高级，与原文细腻真挚的风格高度统一。

汪老师点评： 细节细腻、情绪层层递进，阅卷老师偏爱这种真实动人的叙事。

Para 2

After two seconds’ silence, thunderous applause erupted. The hall was filled with cheers, and even the judges nodded with tears in their eyes. Judy bowed, her face glowing with pride and relief. Off stage, her parents pulled her into a tight hug, their work jackets still smelling of hot dogs. “That was our story,” Judy whispered, smiling through tears. She finally understood: true heroism lies in ordinary love, and the most powerful speech comes straight from the heart.

【教学批注】

• 画面鲜活：still smelling of hot dogs 呼应父母职业，细节真实；
• 人物塑造：父母内敛温柔，人设饱满；
• 主题升华：立意深刻，哲理高级；
• 语言流畅自然，完成人物从功利到真诚的蜕变。

汪老师点评： 细节点睛、结尾升华简洁有力，是收尾典范。

六、写作小贴士｜学生快速提分细节

✅ 用动作代替情绪词：用 clutching her speech tightly 替代 she was nervous✅ 情绪要有过程：紧张→颤抖→渐入真情→坚定投入✅ 回扣伏笔：AI与手写的对比、父母的细节、教练的点醒✅ 结尾升华：从个人经历上升到“平凡英雄、真诚的力量”

七、写在最后

AI能写出华丽的句子，却写不出藏在平凡日子里的爱与坚守。这篇读后续写，不只是英语练习，更是一堂关于“真诚”的成长课：真正的英雄，从来都在身边；最动人的力量，永远是发自内心的真诚。

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